I move swiftly through the dancing throng, my hips matching the beat of the music blaring from the speakers.
I pass by several young beauties, they are not my goal.
It would be so easy. Simply ply them with a few drinks, slip out the back…
ah… there… that one…
I dance across the floor. My lips quirk in amusement as the song changes to a classic by the Bee Gees, so ironic.
I slide onto an empty stool, “Hello.”
I’m trying something a bit different this week. My goal here is to leave a number of details implied rather than written and see what the reader gets out from it. (As per the discussion below I’ve now added a followup post to talk about my thoughts behind the story)
23 thoughts on “Speakeasy #152: Discothèque”
Serial killer? Looking for a challenge, maybe business women in their mid-thirties? I’m intrigued.
Nice take. Not exactly what I was picturing, but that is part of the point of this experiment.
I liked this! This kind of left things wide open and me curious. ♥
Glad you liked it. The open questions in the story while still telling it was what I was aiming for.
Ooh, I like what you did here. I went somewhere dark with it too.
My first though was also “killer.” Or kidnapper. It was the slipping something in their drinks that made me think he was evil.
Ah,a psych who loves a challenge?Knowing my wicked mind,I am naturally rooting for this piece to be a “killer” too 😀 Good one:-)
Interesting choice, and an intriguing tale. The character feels sinister, that much is clear. I like how it’s up to the reader to decide just exactly what he plans to do 🙂 Nice use of the prompts.
Thanks, I’m finding the reader interpretations to be very interesting. I think I may write a post for the moonshine grid to discuss what I was thinking, the hints I dropped about my thoughts and what you great folks thought was up.
Good idea. One of the things I find so fascinating is the interpretations of others on our work. Nobody sees the same thing, and that’s what makes writing so much fun. You took that a step further and were purposely ambiguous. Great fun 🙂
I thought serial killer too, but that may have something to do with “staying alive.” Oh, maybe he’s a vampire and needs to pick his next victim so he can stay alive? I like this game! 🙂
Fun isn’t it?
Wow, I can’t believe you conveyed this totally creepy character vibe in so few words. While I don’t know his intentions, the cues point to something unpleasant (if there’s irony to the song, Stayin Alive, then somebody is likely to die 🙂 )
I’m not saying… 🙂
My favorite. Just such a different angle. I’m so impressed with the story you told in so few words. I am going to have to try this idea sometime…I’m quite intrigued. Great job!
Now this is a huge cliffy!! Left me wanting to know more about this man- we can guess at his intention but what’s his motive? Who is he exactly? Does he select his victims randomly…. or based on certain criteria? I’m eager to know!